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谈谈自己想象中的未来生活情况 Robots and the life in the futu

请以Robots and the life in the future为题,写一篇80词左右的短文,谈谈自己想象中的未来生活情况。

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【文章主题】
通过对机器人工作状况的描述,表达高科技对人们未来生活的重要影响。

【谋篇布局】
本文应遵循“谈表现———怎样做———提号召”的写作思路,即应首先对机器人帮助人们的表现进行列举说明,如购物、做饭等,然后说明机器人工作的方式,即借助不同的工具完成工作,最后号召人们努力工作,只有努力工作才会使梦想变成现实。

【遣词造句】
1. 习作中会用到哪些词语呢?请想一想,然后补充到下面的横线上。
work for, do a lot of things, in different shapes, look after, ______
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2. 如果你在习作中能用到下面的句子,你的文章会更精彩。
1) They will work in everyone’s home.
2) Robots may have the same feelings as humans.
3) We have to work hard to make our dreams come true.


 

下面是两位同学的习作,请欣赏。
Robots and the life in the future
Robots will work for people as great assistants in the future. They will work in everyone’s home. They will do a lot of things such as doing housework and shopping. They’ll use different tools. Oh, their tools will be in different shapes. Robots may have the same feelings as humans.
No one knows what the life in the future will be like. But there is one thing to be sure: we have to work hard to make our dreams come true.
安徽 张 惠

Robots and the life in the future
This is our life in the future. We’ll see robots everywhere. They will be in different shapes and do different things for us.
They will come to our homes and work for us. They will do lots of things like cleaning the house, cooking dinner and looking after children.
They will work in factories. They’ll do heavy work. People will have long vacations and lots of free time.
If you really know what the life in the future will be like, well, work hard and try to make your dream come true.
【点评】

第一篇习作,小作者将机器人对人们未来生活的影响写得很有层次,由表及里,层层深入。先说机器人的“助手”作用,其后列举表现,再进一步描述机器人可以使用各种工具,然后对机器人的未来发展的“感情化”进行大胆预测,最后号召人们努力工作以求实现梦想。全文层次清晰,过渡自然。短语be sure, come true等的使用给文章增色不少。

第二篇习作,开篇点题,作者通过自己的想象向我们展示了未来生活的模样:机器人在我们的生活中起着举足轻重的作用,它们是家庭中的好帮手、是工厂中的顶梁柱,最后以总结性语言收笔,指出将来的生活很美妙,令人憧憬,但它需要我们加倍去努力,将文章的主题升华,启人深思。in different shapes, look after等短语的合理运用使文章显得生动活泼,富有人文性。

★上期习作重组
同学们,看了例文与点评之后,你是否发现例文中有值得你学习的地方呢?例文中的But there is one thing to be sure: we have to work hard to make our dreams come true等句子运用得恰到好处。如果你能把它们重组在你的习作中,你的习作肯定会更加精彩!

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